Scribblers+2011

__We are learning to paint a picture for the reader. __

__To paint a picture for the reader I will need to... __ Use interesting words. Describe the action well, using adverbs and adjectives. Make the reader visualise what is happening and make make them infer.

To do this I will need to "show" and not "tell"

Language features...
 * Simile
 * Metaphor
 * Alliteration
 * Onomatopoeia
 * Ellipses (punctuation)
 * Personification
 * Rhyme
 * Repetition
 * Precise language

"I'm not red, I'm a ghost". "You'll be red in a second" Harry Plopper launced a red tin of Resene towards the ghost. ||
 * Tell || Show ||
 * * Mrs Miles is funny and a little bit naughty.
 * Harry Plopper is an adventurous funny person. || * Mrs Miles shook violently, laughing at the poor boy dancing on stage.
 * Ghosts surrounded him, he struggled up the side of the castle, humongous ghosts came streaming out of the walls. "Think fast Red" Plopper shouted.

__<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">WALT:learning to inform the reader. __

What is the **purpose** of an information report?

**Purpose** = Reason why

//To **inform** someone about something.// **Inform** = Give or tell information.

Why do we need to be informed or inform others? So you don't get a shock when you see things. You need to know stuff. Know about things that you're interested in. If someone is doing research, they don't waste time learning things somebody else has done. So you know about current events.

// The Taieri river is the fourth longest river in New Zealand. It begins at the Lammerlaw ranges moving inland towards the Kakanui ranges where more water flows into the river, before turning east back towards the sea. The Taieri river is very special and is important to animals, farmers, and people who live close by. //

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">WALT: detail to enhance our arguments.

We are learning to link our ideas and choose our sentence types to hook the reader.
 * because
 * however
 * although
 * resulting in
 * therefore

TV and computer games can take over your mind. You could become a bad influence or criminal because when you are young.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">We are learning to use topic related vocabulary and __precise language to enhance detail__.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Information report. <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">You don't use personal pronouns, you may use you in this case. <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Inform the reader about what will happen at camp, with __clear description.__ <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Introduction, main body, and conclusion. <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Write in paragraphs. <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">It can include pictures or diagrams. <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">It can include headings and sub-headings. <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Punctuation. <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">You don't put you opinion in it is all facts.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">We are learning to keep the reader interested by using a hook and precise language.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">What have I done to hook you in as a reader?
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Used the word mischievous, which isn't that common.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">"Mischievous" appeals to kids.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">I've repeated it using a full stop as a long pause.

<span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">What does precise mean? <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;"> Precise means exact. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;"> Use words that describe something exactly.

<span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Success Criteria... <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">How do we know we have used precise language? <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">How do we know we have used an effective hook?

The Lemon Tree

Mischievous. Mischievous is probably the best word that could be used to describe Ra and I. My brother could probably think of a few others, but I tend to disagree. I have no idea where Tea was at this time, but Ra and I were outside in the backyard. Our parents should have known to keep us occupied. They should have known we would get into mischief.

Muffled voices hummed across the fence, I looked at Ra. He was gazing at the magnificent lemon tree, it had far too many lemons for any family to use and I instantly knew what he was thinking. We weren’t worried about the consequences. We never did until it was too late.

Before I knew it I was clinging onto the flimsy wooden fence, trying to keep my head down so they wouldn’t recognise me. I wasn’t particularly good at throwing a ball let alone a lemon, but there I was with a bright yellow bomb in my hands. 3, 2, 1! Ra launched the first bomb it exploded out of sight. They didn’t even notice.

It was my turn. I like think of myself as the ideas man, my ideas are magnificently mischievous, rather than the action man. My hand was shaking under the weight of the massive bomb. Finally I let it go. BAM! The bomb exploded, it wasn’t close enough but it was still closer than Ra’s.

Our confidence was rocketing up into the sky. The yellow bombs were landing like an attack in WW2. The neighbours had noticed now. SMACK! We got him. At this moment we both bolted into the house, we knew we were in trouble. We thought of a plan to save ourselves, we knew it would work.

A moment later we were upstairs in the lounge. “Mum, Tea was throwing lemons at the neighbours”. Poor old Tea was promptly marched next door to apologise. No one believed him when he said he didn’t do it. Success.

We thought we had succeeded and our parents would never find out the truth. We should have made a vow of silence to never speak of the lemon tree again, but we didn’t. Later on that night we were sitting in the lounge laughing about our mischief. “What should we do to Tea tomorrow?” Ra chuckled. We had thought everyone else was in bed. We were wrong. Needless to say we were in trouble, big trouble.