Wordsmiths+2011

We are learning to include interesting vocabulary and language in our writing.

"SAID IS DEAD" Shouted Whispered Cried Shreaked Laughed Yelled Growled Angrily shouted Screamed Wailed

"...AND WENT IS TOO" Jogged Skipped Ran <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Tip toed <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Walked <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Power walked <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Zoomed <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Dawdled <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Shuffled <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Cartwheeled <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Roly polied <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Cantered <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Galloped <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Trotted <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Sprinted <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Hopped <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Flipped <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Bounced <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Somersaulted <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Dived <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Plunged <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Climbed <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Belly flopped <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Paced <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Jumped <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Pounded <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Slinked <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Slipped <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Slid <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 140%;">Skedaddled

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">The Outram Outlaw

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Problem: The outlaws escape from Milton prison and hide out on the Taieri, hunting the Taieri river for gold nuggets that give them super human powers, they find them and blow up doors and windows to break in and steal jewelery.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Solution:

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Setting: <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Characters: <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Eyes Isaac (villain), <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Jewels Jordan (villain), <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Detective Nicole Robertsdaughter, <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Detective Ko Dee, <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Daniel Imafarmer (farmer), <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Tylah Sheseesyou (local, retired spy) <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Evie Knowsall (local scientist).

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Plot: <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">The detectives have been looking for them for 3 days, they discover them in the Taieri river looking for gold nuggets, but it's too late because they already have the powers.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">WALT: use apostrophes and sentence punctuation.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">The snowball... Thick white snow blanketed my front yard. Without damaging the bird and cat prints in the snow, I snuck down to the letter box and bent down so Nic wouldn't be able to see me. The snow was cold in my hands, but I knew it would be worth it.

I peered over the letter box. "Don't do it." Is he for real? He must know I'm going to do it.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">We are learning to inform the reader.

The Taieri River is the fourth longest river in New Zealand. It begins at the Lammerlaw ranges, near Waipori, it moves inland before turning back towards the east coast of the South Island opening out to sea at Taieri Mouth, near Dunedin. The Taieri river is important for farming, wildlife and sports.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">WALT: persuade the reader to agree with our position by adding detail.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">An argument needs...
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">A head (intro), main body, foot (conclusion)
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Points, reasons, strong points and opinions
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Paragraphs
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">A position (your opinion)
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">A hook
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">An audience

What do you care about? Think about an issue around the school or that you really care about. Who do you want to read it? What impact do you want to have on the reader? How do you want them to feel?

We have had to upgrade our security at school because people keep stealing from us. This costs **lots** of money! When we had to upgrade our security that took precious money, that our school would have spent on books and other learning resources. If you steal from us we miss out on learning and this is bad for our education, and YOU will be caught.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">We are learning to identify the features of an argument.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">We need...
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">A position
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">An audience
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">A hook

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Our Pk about reports... <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Introduction
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">It introduces your main ideas.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">It's about 4 lines long or more.

Dear Jacob

An argument introduction needs...
 * A position (a statement that shows our opinion for the whole argument.)
 * An audience (who is going to read it.)

<span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;"> We are learning to organise our ideas into paragraphs.

<span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">It has to have an introduction, main body and a conclusion. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">It has lots of facts. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Information that is true. (non-fiction) <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">You don't share your opinion. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">It is about one topic. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Has information that you know.
 * __<span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">What do we know about information reports? __**

<span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Lets organise our ideas into paragraphs.

<span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">This is the beginning of our plan that we have worked on together...

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<span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">We are learning to add detail by using precise language. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;"> <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">What does precise mean? <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Precise means exact.

Success Criteria. <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">I need to use words that describe something exactly.

<span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Let's highlight the precise language in "The Lemon Tree" <span style="color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">Follow up: Complete the highlighting for the rest of the lemon tree. Create your own naughty story brainstorm.

<span style="background-color: #008080; color: #800080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 160%;">How do we know we have used precise language?

The Lemon Tree

Mischievous. Mischievous is probably the best word that could be used to describe Ra and I. My brother could probably think of a few others, but I tend to disagree. I have no idea where Tea was at this time, but Ra and I were outside in the backyard. Our parents should have known to keep us occupied. They should have known we would get into mischief.

Muffled voices hummed across the fence, I looked at Ra. He was gazing at the magnificent lemon tree, it had far too many lemons for any family to use and I instantly knew what he was thinking. We weren’t worried about the consequences. We never did until it was too late.

Before I knew it I was clinging onto the flimsy wooden fence, trying to keep my head down so they wouldn’t recognise me. I wasn’t particularly good at throwing a ball let alone a lemon, but there I was with a bright yellow bomb in my hands. 3, 2, 1! Ra launched the first bomb it exploded out of sight. They didn’t even notice.

It was my turn. I like think of myself as the ideas man, my ideas are magnificently mischievous, rather than the action man. My hand was shaking under the weight of the massive bomb. Finally I let it go. BAM! The bomb exploded, it wasn’t close enough but it was still closer than Ra’s.

Our confidence was rocketing up into the sky. The yellow bombs were landing like an attack in WW2. The neighbours had noticed now. SMACK! We got him. At this moment we both bolted into the house, we knew we were in trouble. We thought of a plan to save ourselves, we knew it would work.

A moment later we were upstairs in the lounge. “Mum, Tea was throwing lemons at the neighbours”. Poor old Tea was promptly marched next door to apologise. No one believed him when he said he didn’t do it. Success.

We thought we had succeeded and our parents would never find out the truth. We should have made a vow of silence to never speak of the lemon tree again, but we didn’t. Later on that night we were sitting in the lounge laughing about our mischief. “What should we do to Tea tomorrow?” Ra chuckled. We had thought everyone else was in bed. We were wrong. Needless to say we were in trouble, big trouble.