Wordsmiths+2012

We are learning to paint a picture for the reader by using **precise language** and __language features__.

I am going to show the reader what happened and not just tell them. Mrs Tansley handed us our **delicious gourmet** sausages and potatoes, we carefully placed our potatoes in the fire and tried to find clean sticks for our sausages. ||
 * Tell || Show ||
 * My favourite part was lighting the fire. || We **searched** high and low for leaves and twigs that would make a decent flame. We **hauled** the **giant boulders** over to the twigs, well actually they were boulders of the smallest variety. The **boulders** were __**a small mountain**__ that was soon **engulfed** in flames, I had to step back because I was afraid they would reach out and get me. The sticks eventually burned down into little red hot embers, __**bright like rubys**__.

WALT: use language features to hook in the reader.



Fox by Margaret Wild

Physical description.

Behaviour: How they speak/ act, what makes them unique?

Reputation: How do they affect others?

Environment/belongings: Describe this.

//Dog // //Dog's trustworthy jaws gently cradle Magpie. His silky golden brown coat is spotless with no dandruff or tics. He is clean unlike most of his kind. His tongue pokes out in an almost smile. Pearly white razors glisten inside his jaw. Sharp ears pierce the sky like the great pyramids. Clouds cover his retired eye, his one working eye sparkles in the sunlight, working a full time job. His sharp sword like tail slashes through the air, as he flys through the wind. //

//Dog, wild, but not wild, he is gentle and kind in his own way. Domesticated, but not domesticated, he is caring and trusting of others, almost like he is owned. He is not bothered by blindness in one eye, it does not phase him or slow his life down. He is active everyday, like Usain Bolt, with a bird on his back. //

//Magpie is his eye and he is her wings. Dog is Magpie's saviour and she is his. He is an emotional life saver, knowing the right things to say and do. An ambulance in golden fur. Dog is gullible and easily fooled by the cunning red fox. He trusts him and doesn't sense the increasing envy and anger. Dog won't listen to the suspicions of Magpie. //

//A dark, damp gloomy cave in the Outback is home to Dog. He is surrounded by a dull, dusty and brown forest. The trees are thin and sparse, not many leaves litter the ground. Silence surround them and there is little life in these woods. //

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">WALT:use a variety of sentence beginnings to hook in the reader.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">Do you think we should go on camp every year? I think we should. All students in the senior syndicate at Outram School should go on camp every year. There are millions of reasons why we should go on camp every year. School camp is important for our education. Life may not be fair but that doesn't mean that we shouldn't go on camp every year.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">__My conclusion__ <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">Needs a position (our opinion). <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">We could repeat some of our main ideas, but we don't want to use the exact same sentence. <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">We might <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">We could ask a rhetorical question at the end.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">WALT: write in sentences that make sense.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;"><span style="color: #800000; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">A sentence is a group of words that make sense.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">Features of flight

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">Flight is movement through air that is controlled. To fly, the animal or object must generate it's own lift and thrust. Four forces effect flight, lift, thrust, drag and weight. Birds and planes use these forces to achieve flight. They have similar shaped wings that enable them to fly.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">We are learning to use **descriptive language** to **paint a picture for the reader.**

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 200%;">Jack's parents were **gazing** at the tv. Chickens were pecking the **dry, dull, drought stricken** ground. My hand was shaking from the weight of the bb gun.