The+mystery+of+the+missing+children

We are learning to show and not tell, when we write.

 We are writing a mystery narrative. Our two main characters are a teacher and a principal.

**Mrs Miles** Is funny, she is different to the other teachers. She thinks outside the square. She is hyperactive and likes sushi.

**Show and not tell...**


 * Tell || Show ||
 * * Mrs Miles is funny. || * Mrs Miles liked to play practical jokes on people. "Knock knock" "Who's there?" Bob asked. // This shows us that she is cheeky and has a good sense of humour. Perhaps she was naughty at school. // ||


 * Mr B. Russel-Sprout **


 * Tell || Show ||
 * ** He is evil. || * He likes punching people.
 * Mr B. Russell sprout hunched crookedly over the cauldron. He grabbed the children and tossed them into the pot. The bunnies screamed as they were thrown into the burning pot. ||

What do we have to do to show and not tell?
 * By not saying "She's funny", but by something that is related to that.
 * Describe it or the character rather than telling.
 * Add descriptive words to the characters actions. I.E "His mastermind plan was evil."

Our mystery... Mr B. Russel Sprout has a lair under his office. As they leave the class Mrs Miles pushes a button and they fall down a big hole. When they get accepted to the school they have to get their details. Then they clone them and send the clones home.Mrs Miles has been brainwashed, by Mr Russel Sprout. A student teacher saves them. The weather helps them and floods the lair.

Mr B Russel sprout looked around checking to see no one was watching. He pressed the button underneath his coffee cup. Creeping down a dark tunnel he saw a light. Brodie entered H.Q.O.K.E.