Ink+Slingers+2012

We are learning to use personal pronouns in our writing to draw in the reader.

//We// **searched** high and low for leaves and twigs that would make a decent flame,
 * you showed which ones would make a good flame.
 * you watched over us while we searched for twigs in the wild.
 * you supervised us while we were collecting twigs to make the fire burn so we could cook food to satisfy our stomachs.
 * you told us what was right and what was wrong.

//We// **hauled** the **giant boulders** over to the twigs, well actually they were boulders of the smallest variety. The **boulders** were __**a small mountain**__ that was soon **engulfed** in flames, //I// had to step back because //I// was afraid they would reach out and get //me//. The sticks eventually burned down into little red hot embers, __**bright like rubys**__.

Mrs Tansley handed //us our// **delicious gourmet** sausages and potatoes, //we// carefully placed our potatoes in the fire and tried to find clean sticks for //our// sausages.

WALT: understand and use complex punctuation.

Fox by Margaret Wild

Physical description. Sharp lashing eyes. Fox's piercing sharp eyes glare at Magpie, telling a different story.

Behaviour: How they speak/ act, what makes them unique?

Reputation: How do they affect others?

Environment/belongings: Describe this.

//<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">Dog //

//<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">Dog's trustworthy jaws gently cradle Magpie. His silky golden brown coat is spotless with no dandruff or tics. He is clean unlike most of his kind. His tongue pokes out in an almost smile. Pearly white razors glisten inside his jaw. Sharp ears pierce the sky like the great pyramids. Clouds cover his retired eye, his one working eye sparkles in the sunlight, working a full time job. His sharp sword like tail slashes through the air, as he flys through the wind. //

//<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">Dog, wild, but not wild, he is gentle and kind in his own way. Domesticated, but not domesticated, he is caring and trusting of others, almost like he is owned. He is not bothered by blindness in one eye, it does not phase him or slow his life down. He is active everyday, like Usain Bolt, with a bird on his back. //

//<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">Magpie is his eye and he is her wings. Dog is Magpie's saviour and she is his. He is an emotional life saver, knowing the right things to say and do. An ambulance in golden fur. Dog is gullible and easily fooled by the cunning red fox. He trusts him and doesn't sense the increasing envy and anger. Dog won't listen to the suspicions of Magpie. //

//<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">A dark, damp gloomy cave in the Outback is home to Dog. He is surrounded by a dull, dusty and brown forest. The trees are thin and sparse, not many leaves litter the ground. Silence surround them and there is little life in these woods. //

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">WALT: organise our ideas into and link ideas between paragraphs.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">What is a paragraph? <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">A group of sentences that are put into a group with mainly the same idea.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">Repeat an idea/ word/similar words.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">Link at the end of a paragraph and beginning of next paragraph by using a similar idea.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">Including an idea before it's really important in a paragraph before it's own paragraph.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">Mention an idea or vocab in the introduction and conclusion.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">Think about what and how we are repeating and make sure we don't just write the same thing.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">WALT: include language features to maintain audience interest.

<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">Language features can include...
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">**Onomatopoeia**- are words that sound like their meaning.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">**Alliteration**- repetition of the consonant sound, often used at the beginning of words.
 * __<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">**Assonance**- repetition of a vowel sound. __
 * __<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">**Rhyme**- words sound the same. __
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">**Repetition**. Repeat words, sentences, or phrases.
 * __<span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">**Elipses**- ... used for effect or to help include suspense. __
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">**Metaphor**- is like a simile without using like or as. Describes something as being something else.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">**Simile**- Describes something by comparing it to something else using like or as.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">**Descriptive and precise language**.- is clear descriptive and exact.
 * <span style="color: #000080; font-family: 'Comic Sans MS',cursive; font-size: 32px;">**Writing between the lines**- Leaving clues to make them figure out ideas or make assumptions.